THE DAGGER-Poem
(A PICTURE OF MAVILIN)
Me
Weak
And empty
Fucked
Me
Us
We
All
Pick
Up our Daggers
With hatred in our souls; in our
Me
Weak
And empty
Fucked
Me
Us
We
All
Pick
Up our Daggers
With hatred in our souls; in our
Torchered and polluted minds
Nothing else matters
We'll fight
We'll strive
We'll fight
While alive
We will kill
We will lose
We will steal
We've chosen
To either kill
Or to suicide
Which 1 will
You decide!
You'll still
Be here
To kill
Even
I
Nothing else matters
We'll fight
We'll strive
We'll fight
While alive
We will kill
We will lose
We will steal
We've chosen
To either kill
Or to suicide
Which 1 will
You decide!
You'll still
Be here
To kill
Even
I
posted by MAVILIN at
5/14/2006 04:36:00 PM
28 Comments:
Not yet my dear. I'm not finished the blog.
how tedious
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aw mel..such flattery
btw guys...notice "with hatred within our souls". With hate in our souls...we will kill....
we will kill both spiritually and phisycally, but i'm refering more spritualy.....usually my poems are like that.
things i noticed...
'we will CHOSE' ?!?!?!?!
'or to SUICIDE' !!?!?!?!
'Which 1 will you decide!' ?!?!?!
okay so i guess you had to mispell choose in order to keep the shape.. and i guess the same with 'to suicide' instead of to commit it... but why did you put the exclamation mark instead of the question mark?!?!
Okay lord, you can be my spelling program for Mavilin 2. heh, why not?
I have to admit, "chose" IS spelt wrong... I guess my spirit helper didn't see that too! damnit...
I don't see anything wrong with "to suicide"..cuz it was ment to be...
And about the ! mark, you can cut out the "which one will" and just leave "you decide!" but even with the whole sentence , it does make sense because i'm making more of a statement,than a question.
its cool how u made the poem look like a dagger..i like it :D
one does not "suicide" one mus COMMIT suicide..
Heh Lord, it does make sense. hmm.
don't be dumb...it had to rhyme. heh :p
you're fucked up, dude
well thank you anonymous. Thanks for letting us know that you are too... gby!
There. my spirit helper helped me fix up my poem. now it's fine..
very abstract, very cool. I love it
eat shit, pussy!
you're a crap poet.
deal with it.
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I'll eat shit and say i'm a crap poet if i see urs better than mine......
Seriously Mav? That's pretty nasty...
Yeah, depends what kind of shit though...
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